A couple of my Poems.

[XxFreakyDancerxX]

These two poems, Lies and Crimson Tears are my two favorite poems I have written. Feel free to tell me what you think, or what I should work on. =]

Lies

I thought I knew you,
But I don't.
You said to remember you,
But I won't.

You told me lies,
Never the truth.
Now, all I want,
Is a little proof.

You never called,
You always stalled.
I never saw you,
Boy, this is my cue.

I turn my back,
And walk away.
You grab my hand,
And beg me to stay.

I pull my hand,
And turn around.
You slide down the wall,
And sit on the ground.

Now it's been months,
Since we last talked.
But I think back,
And I'm glad I walked.

You call me up,
You say your sorry.
But I tell you,
That I'm still angry.

This is the cost,
You have to pay.
For all the endless,
Lies you say.

You lost me,
I'm never coming back.
Now you live,
In endless black.

I wish you luck,
But it must suck.
To know you lost,
The one good being.
Over such,
A stupid thing.

Crimson Tears

She sits in the light,
She watches the rain.
She can hear them fight,
She can feel the pain.

Silent tears fall down her face,
Her cheeks are flushed a shade of pink.
She walks to the bathroom with an elegant grace,
And stops in front of the porcelain sink.

They do not stop,
They never do.
She wants it to stop,
She needs it too.

She reaches for the silver knife,
And places it to her snow white skin.
She doesn't want to live through life,
She doesn't want to know who will win.

With one quick motion,
She pulls the blade.
This is her notion,
She never really was afraid.

The crimson blood flows down her arm,
It runs into a bright red pool.
The blood itself is nice and warm,
Why did life have to be so cruel?

She lays her head upon the wall,
She lived through all these horrible years.
But now it's time for her to fall,
It's time she shed those crimson tears.

[XxFreakyDancerxX]

Hehe. Thanks. And I'm sorry...Was it the coloring that made your eyes hurt?

[Melannie]

They are both really good.

-Reps.-

[XxFreakyDancerxX]

Thank you.

[the girl]

i liked them

[Mystic]

Originally Posted by XxFreakyDancerxX

Hehe. Thanks. And I'm sorry...Was it the coloring that made your eyes hurt?

no its the font used ...

not bad i liked the 2nd one best tho ...

[XxFreakyDancerxX]

Ok. I fixed the font just incase.
And thank you.

[Mystic]

Originally Posted by XxFreakyDancerxX

Ok. I fixed the font just incase.
And thank you.

yes its better but if you want ppl to read your poems you need to make the font and the size readable ...
if its too small for some to read they will just leave the thread ...
you used a size 1 ... why so small? ...

[XxFreakyDancerxX]

Lol. I really thought I put it on a bigger size.

[Μř ßłũę Šĸŷ]

I really appreciate your work.
Liked it a lot.
Everyone should have the chance to read this.