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07-02-2006, 12:35 AM
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I talk too much!
Join Date: May 2004
Location: indiana
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Why Am I Afraid
this poem i juss wrote...im still working on it some...i juss wanna know if its bad, good, alright, or in between...or even if it makes sense...lol...please tell me wat u think...good or bad...pls tell me...
Why Am I Afraid?
Why am I afraid
to let someone in my life
why am i afraid
to love
or even be loved
Why am i afraid
to open up
and share my feelings
why am i so afraid
is it because
afraid to get hurt
afraid to cry
or is the reason
i'm so scared
is because
i'll be happy...
im still working on it...lol
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07-02-2006, 03:24 AM
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Originally Posted by Steph
this poem i juss wrote...im still working on it some...i juss wanna know if its bad, good, alright, or in between...or even if it makes sense...lol...please tell me wat u think...good or bad...pls tell me...
Why Am I Afraid?
Why am I afraid
to let someone in my life
why am i afraid
to love
or even be loved
Why am i afraid
to open up
and share my feelings
why am i so afraid
is it because
afraid to get hurt
afraid to cry
or is the reason
i'm so scared
is because
i'll be happy...
im still working on it...lol
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not bad.......
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07-02-2006, 03:32 AM
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i agree not bad 
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07-02-2006, 10:30 PM
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I talk too much!
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Location: indiana
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thx u guys...yeah i need to reword the ending...cuz it doesnt sound right...
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07-03-2006, 03:55 PM
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Thats pritty good,Steph.
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Rambled words of a scrambled heart
never heard, just torn apart.
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07-04-2006, 03:26 PM
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I talk too much!
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thx chicksta
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07-04-2006, 07:34 PM
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i thought it was pretty good ...
and so true for alot of ppl ...
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Thanks Gordon
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07-04-2006, 08:53 PM
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I talk too much!
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thanks mystic....thats how i felt at the time i was writing it and it juss came off the top of my head...lol
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07-05-2006, 12:44 AM
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Originally Posted by Steph
thanks mystic....thats how i felt at the time i was writing it and it juss came off the top of my head...lol
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your very welcome ...
i still say that when you write from the heart it makes the best poetry ...
doesn't alwayz need to rhyme ...
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Thanks Gordon
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07-05-2006, 12:51 AM
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I love your emotion....keep those raw thoughts on paper. Maybe work alittle on delivery. good stuff all around.
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