Take a look.

[Unknown Entity]

Have you ever felt truly alone?
Have you ever looked at people on the street and hated them,
Hated them for being so perfect,
Hated them for being so well placed,
Among the other perfect people.

They say it's better to have loved and lost,
Than to never have felt love,
Whoever first said that must have felt like me,
You could not even begin to understand,
How painful it is to feel so alone,
So miserable and self doubting,
That you never think anybody could love you.

When I see couples, any couples,
I almost want to cry, I almost want to tear them apart,
I almost want them to feel my pain,
I almost want to die.

I don't think humans are meant to be alone,
We all want someone to hug, to fall back on,
We all want someone who loves us,
Not having someone by yourside. to help you through hard times,
Not having someone to do the smalls things that make you happy,
Not having anyone,
You cant understand what it's like,
To be totally alone.



That is how I feel often, perhaps some of you feel the same way sometimes.

I don't want this associated with any run of the mill, bitchy, fake emo poems.
This is me trying to describe a confusing emotion, true sorrow.

[Unknown Entity]

Originally Posted by Fearless_Virgin

Umm...I didn't really like it << although it's got lots of emotions and feelings, it's not very poetic at all << I mean, if you put every line immediately after the previous one, you would end up getting one long paragraph.

What I'm trying to say is, this could be...anything. A piece of article, or a short story or a diary entry, or whatever. But it's not really a poem. << but that's just my opinion.

I was going to mention that, but this isn't the poetry forum now is it?
It's sort of a poem/note.

[Mystic]

Originally Posted by Unknown Entity

I was going to mention that, but this isn't the poetry forum now is it?
It's sort of a poem/note.

its the Literature forum so anything to do with writing can be in here ...
whether its a story or a poem it doesnt matter ...

[SatansLittleHelper]

Originally Posted by Unknown Entity

Have you ever felt truly alone?
Have you ever looked at people on the street and hated them,
Hated them for being so perfect,
Hated them for being so well placed,
Among the other perfect people.

They say it's better to have loved and lost,
Than to never have felt love,
Whoever first said that must have felt like me,
You could not even begin to understand,
How painful it is to feel so alone,
So miserable and self doubting,
That you never think anybody could love you.

When I see couples, any couples,
I almost want to cry, I almost want to tear them apart,
I almost want them to feel my pain,
I almost want to die.

I don't think humans are meant to be alone,
We all want someone to hug, to fall back on,
We all want someone who loves us,
Not having someone by yourside. to help you through hard times,
Not having someone to do the smalls things that make you happy,
Not having anyone,
You cant understand what it's like,
To be totally alone.



That is how I feel often, perhaps some of you feel the same way sometimes.

I don't want this associated with any run of the mill, bitchy, fake emo poems.
This is me trying to describe a confusing emotion, true sorrow.

umm not really my style but its yours and yours alone..so i guess if you like it..thats cool....

[Unknown Entity]

Originally Posted by Fearless_Virgin

Oh, well I thought it was a poem, cause you said

I compared it to a kind of poem, that doesn't make it one.

[Mandy101]

I'ts not a poem, not an article, not a paragraph,it is words with emotion, a feeling in which someone feels, it is a moment of thought, or desperation. It captures what one knows.(heartache) it is what one interpretes from reading it. I liked it it was a peice you could give thought to.

[Western_Samurai]

It's difficult separating a poem from prose,
More so than separating these from those,
Like separating the thorns from a
Rose.

But seriously i think what separates a poem from just regular prose is that the poem makes some insight by using a level of abstraction to convey the meaning rather than just saying what you mean. A level of abstraction could be an analogy, this would lend more meaning and profundity to the poem if done correctly.

[Raymond James]

Originally Posted by Unknown Entity

Have you ever felt truly alone?
Have you ever looked at people on the street and hated them,
Hated them for being so perfect,
Hated them for being so well placed,
Among the other perfect people.

They say it's better to have loved and lost,
Than to never have felt love,
Whoever first said that must have felt like me,
You could not even begin to understand,
How painful it is to feel so alone,
So miserable and self doubting,
That you never think anybody could love you.

When I see couples, any couples,
I almost want to cry, I almost want to tear them apart,
I almost want them to feel my pain,
I almost want to die.

I don't think humans are meant to be alone,
We all want someone to hug, to fall back on,
We all want someone who loves us,
Not having someone by yourside. to help you through hard times,
Not having someone to do the smalls things that make you happy,
Not having anyone,
You cant understand what it's like,
To be totally alone.



That is how I feel often, perhaps some of you feel the same way sometimes.

I don't want this associated with any run of the mill, bitchy, fake emo poems.
This is me trying to describe a confusing emotion, true sorrow.

I like it, its gritty and is without the gay gloss that most people put on their poems so its better received by the masses, nice one.

[Unknown Entity]

You speak to me, From a distance,
As if I was a threat, your words confuse me,
Are you feeling this too?
Are my feeling all wrong, Are my feelings taboo?
An emotional blade flurry, when we speak you shred my heart,
I dont know if this is a good feeling or not, I dont know if I can handle this.

I want to feel you, I want to stroke your skin,
You are so close, but so out of reach,
You are standing infront of me, giving me your love,
But is it the same kind? I'd swiftly regret it if I was wrong,
So I'll just carry on, not saying A word,
I'll controll my feelings for the both of us,
Silent.


Once again it's not really A poem so to speak, it could be a letter, A journal entry etc. Take it how you please.

i like it