A poem i made 4 you to cry...

[~$pr2nv$~]

IF YOU FIND


YOU CANNOT STOP UNTIL YOU REACH THE END THEN YOU MUST HAVE A


VERY BIG


HEART...





Mommy.. Johnny brought a gun to school,


He told his friends that it was cool,


And when he pulled the trigger back,


It shot with a great crack.


Mommy, I was a good girl, I did What I was told,


I went to school, I got straight A's, I even got the gold!


But Mommy, when I went school that day,


I never said good-bye,


I'm sorry Mommy, I had to go, But Mommy, please don't cry.


When Johnny shot the gun, He hit me and another,


And all because Johnny, Got the gun from his older brother.


Mommy, please tell Daddy; That I love him very much,


And please tell Chris; my boyfriend; That it wasn't just a crush.


And tell my little sister; That she is the only one now,


And tell my dear sweet grandmother; I'll be waiting for her now,


And tell my wonderful friends; That they always were the best;


Mommy, I'm not the first, I'm no better than the rest.


Mommy, tell my teachers; I won't show up for class,


And never to forget this, And please don't let this pass.


Mommy, why'd it have to be me? No one deserves this,


Mommy, warn the others, Mommy I left without a kiss.


And Mommy tell the doctors; I know they really did try,


I think I even saw a doctor, Trying not to cry.


Mommy, I'm slowly dying, With a bullet in my chest,


But Mommy please remember, I'm in heaven with the rest.


Mommy I ran as fast as I could,


When I heard that crack, Mommy, listen to me if you would,


I wanted to go to college, I wanted to try things that were new,


I guess I'm not going with Daddy, On that trip to the new zoo.


I wanted to get married, I wanted to have a kid,


I wanted to be an actress, Mommy, I wanted to live.


But Mommy I must go now, The time is getting late,


Mommy, tell my Chris, I'm sorry but I had to cancel the date.


I love you Mommy, I always have, I know; you know it's true,


And Mommy all I wanted to say is, "Mommy, I love you."


****In Memory of The Columbine Students Who Were Lost****




Please if you would,


Pass this around,


I'd be happy if you could,


Don't smash this on the ground.


If you pass this on,


Maybe people will cry,


Just keep this in your heart,


For the people who didn't get to say "Good-bye".


*so please community pm your friends and pass this poem i made on. it will make a big difference to make people cry tears of joy and sadness... u deserve a good cry now and then all i ask you is to copy and paste this in your pm and pm all of your friends this poem thank you.*

thanks alot, -Luis-

[Xx CRaZeee xX]

LOL, let me get this right, just before she died she wrote this poem [making sure it rhymed]?

And- Guns ARE cool.

Maybe people will cry

So the purpose of this was to make people cry [and remeber, etc etc] but- TO CRY? What kind of sadistic people are you?

[~$pr2nv$~]

So the purpose of this was to make people cry [and remeber, etc etc] but- TO CRY? What kind of sadistic people are you?[/quote]

umm.... to me you have no feelings or emotions. you sound like some gothic person dat likes to cut themselves ect. and just to make this straight its good to cry and can u make a better poem?

[Xx CRaZeee xX]

Originally Posted by ~$pr2nv$~

umm.... to me you have no feelings or emotions. you sound like some gothic person dat likes to cut themselves ect. and just to make this straight its good to cry and can u make a better poem?

You sound like a stereotypical, stupid, selfish, arrogant bastard.
Ooooh, I think I got it in one.

Since you felt the need to personally attack me because I didn't agree or acknowledge your little cliched overdone poem; let me clear my personality [not that it matters, nor should you be dignified with an explanation.] but-

I have feelings and emotions, but not to something's that's a long time ago [in the sense and comparison to other tragic, recent events] something YOU didn't come up with; so it's not personal; even though it *MAY* reflect your feelings on the situation. And people die everyday. What about the previous experiences the child [who was originally the victim but became the shooter] felt? They're portrayed through the media negatively.

It's human nature that people disagree, and physical force [even though it's not ethically right] occurs.
It's also a lifestyle; you live; you die.

What about Third World Countries, huh? They've ALWAYS suffered, but this is average American's who've seen how treating people 'comes back' on them.

I'm not your stereotypical 'gothic' person. I'm a mere person. Without any pre-concieved ideologies.
I'm not into cutting or injuring myself, I'd prefer to hurt others.

It's NOT good to cry, it shows weakness.

And finally, yes I'd make it more original, and not cheap sentiment: with the childhood innocence, and strong relationship between the concerned characters.
And, poetically speaking, I don't think you should criticize poems; because it's an expression of how they feel. But- Like I said the unoriginality makes it seem fake.

So how about NOT being an ignorant based, too concerned in their own ideas?

[Nebacudnezar]

That has to be one the most haert wrenching poems ive ever read it touched a nerve for me.

[Steph]

i like the poem...it sad...but its juss like the other poems out there...onebout drinking and driving...so i mean they all have the same purpose..but this poem did touch me though...juss school nowadays u cant really trust it...

[~$pr2nv$~]

thnx guys i worked hard on that poem it took a long time and thinking to make it just perfect! thanks.

[Zero Xaerus]

Great Poem, Bravo.

It did'nt make me cry though.

[lipps_lush_leah]

i think that poem was lovely. it was very touching and very sad, i have a little tear in my eye as i have jusst read it, and i could never make a poem that good up, im not very good like that,

[~$pr2nv$~]

tyvm i really appreciate all these people liking my poem as i said it took time and dedication... thanks again.